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Honey Lips II [One Shot] 
25th-Apr-2008 09:52 pm
uru drama
Title: Honey Lips II
Author: outori
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Ruki x Uruha
Genre: College, smut, ProfXStudent
Warnings: None, except for not beta-read
Disclaimer: Not owning anyone in the story, only the story
Synopsis: On Ruki’s first day back at college he’s visiting a promising sounding lecture. Both the lecture and the lecturer turn out to be extremely enticing, more than he’d ever thought they’d be.
Author’s notes: YES! Finally, I made it. I wrote and upped a fic that is not negative whatsoever, no death, no despair, it’s just… a fic. And a long one ^ ^” It’s almost 8000 words *bows for forgiveness* You know what? I love college. I lovelovelovelove it xD I get the best ideas there *laughs* So erm… If I’d dedicate it to anyone, it prolly would be to that prof of mine. Hehe… Though, alas, he’s not even remotely beautiful, let alone of such an alluring personality. Sadly.
About the name I gave Uru’s character as the prof, Mashin Mitsudou 蜜道魔唇, it’s entirely made up. I like playing around with Kanjis. A lot. ^^”
And for the smut… You’ll have to be a bit patient, but there’ll be … some XD~




First day back at college, and the others were already going on my nerves. That perpetual chit-chat, those voices going up and down like busy flies… There still were people arriving, sitting down, some of the staged seats creaking under the weight. The rustling of paper as some of the diligent ones took out their writing pads, the cluttering of pens being put on the little extendable tables. Some of the girls chatting and giggling like teenagers, though they were actually far beyond that age. You should have thought they had more brain up in there skulls to think their high-pitched tittering was anywhere close to attracting. If I hadn’t liked being at university so much, I probably wouldn’t have put up with all of this, instead settled with a job, and left any educational institution behind me. But I loved it; so why should I bother. I just sank back into my seat, pulled my shoulders up and waited for the course to start.

'Psychology in the conscious usage of language' The subject had allured me.Collapse )
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2nd-May-2008 03:16 pm (UTC)
Oh, and I like this line "Praise. Lie. Soothe. Cling. Torture." the best 'cause it shows the best how ... how difficult words are to handle. To understand. 'Cause their meanings can be so very different ... Praise someone, choose the wrong words and make it sound like a lie, choose the right words to tell your lie and they might sound soothing. Soothe someone with your words, but use them wrongly and they'll be torture, choose them wisely and the torture won't be seen as torture but something nicer ... yet again a lie. All in once.
It always is more than just one of these things, isn't it? (I'll be thinking about that for the rest of the day, I believe. ... and I love it <3)

I really like that you go on with the story without giving us the student's name for so long ... even when he is asked about it by the prof, you refuse giving it to us just yet. (Of course, everyone can guess 'cause we know about the pairing, but if we didn't know it yet ... it would actually be even more interesting.)

The prof suddenly asking him a question confused me ... asking him a question while Ruki imagined ... dreamed? ... He got me lost in that dream as well, in his dream ... *clearing head again* (got me lost that quickly, as well ... ...)

The way you describe Ruki fighting with himself ... fighting in order to say something, and then this daydream that at times catches up with him again ... it is, I think, amazing.
Gosh, I wouldn't have minded if you had described the rest of the lesson more detailed as well. More of these thoughts. More of these well chosen words (those used to tell this story, those the prof says and those to tell Ruki's daydream and thoughts) ... I felt like sitting in that room myself, quietly observing the whole situation in some corner, looking from that one certain student to the prof, not caring about the class, but about these two ... mainly about how Ruki acts and reacts. I wouldn't mind spending 90 minutes doing exactly this.

"making them think, making them actually want to solve the problems, want to find out, and look beyond the many surfaces" ... he seems to be a very good prof, then. Not boring at all. Not that he ever seemed like being boring ... but well

"It all went past me in a blur, it seemed, a blur with only one, focused center" ... this is interesting now. Do you remember what I wrote at the beginning? About everything around Ruki moving faster. Now, the lecture would have been the complete opposite ... Ruki still moving normally while those around him are moving in (very) slow motion. Though not everyone matters. His fellows students might be blurred out a little bit. Blurred out, left in shadows with only the professor still being perfectly visible. And with Ruki being able to notice every oh so slow movement of this man - mainly those in his face ... (I absolutely love scenes like that *wants that as a movie now with a lot of close up shots*)

... Did he know that Ruki was still in the room?
... Did he know that Ruki might follow him?
... The way you described him, him standing in front of the table, looking at Ruki. It sounds like he was kind of waiting for someone to get inside. Which would make him a player. At least I guess ... *cough* Uruha being a player is probably the nicest thing ever *cough*

“You can love me now…” ... that's. What I'd call cocky. (but I <333)
Now ... I'm thinking. I mean. I would love to read about this lecture again. But, this time, I would like the story being told from the prof's pov ... Why did he ask for his name? Did he really look at him everytime he was writing something down? Or was that just an imagination? DID he feel ... know ... whatever it was. But did he know that Ruki woulf follow him? Did he want to ... ?
'Cause he doesn't even care for any explanation. He doesn't care why Ruki got in there ... he knows. Somehow, he knows. He never just once thought about him wanting to tell him something about the lecture or anything. He knew Ruki wouldn't be able to, didn't he?
Gosh, I want to get to know about his thoughts now *g* ... a player's thoughts. A player ... who might play with words some more, of course. And Ruki ... well ...
2nd-May-2008 08:54 pm (UTC)
Yes, words... I love to think about them sometimes as well... Well, I did a lot during the fic, I guess. Thoughts just kept flowing past me. I ... like to think beyond words, though.

*laughs at you having gotten lost so quickly, just like Ruki* Well. That's Uru for you ne xD

*flattered at the word 'amazing'... yet again* Awww... Well. You can't have everything ~,^ Gotta imagine it yourself. Get lost in daydreams and dream about it <3 My fics are free for use for dreams ne XD

Oh right... the blur and the focused center... yes I do remember what you wrote. How ... fitting, in some way. Nice.

I'm pretty sure he knew who would get into that room. *twitches an eyebrow* And yes... Uruha... is... all that and... more...

Yes. Exactly. ... Gods I love the way your thoughts spin and spin and revolve around the characters. It's like... fertilizer. He knows, ne. He knows much more than he'd left obvious for others. And I guess... It takes a lot to actually ever know him.
2nd-May-2008 03:16 pm (UTC)
HOLY FUCK ... is everything I can say about the further parts. Until now.
I don't know if I have ever read such a scene. I don't know if a scene like that ever felt more passionate, more heated, more wanting, more needing, more real than this one ... when reading it. I guess it didn't. Not like this. Not this 'real'. Not this slowly - so to speak. Not this ... *can't find any other words* ... ... The kiss. The kiss ... I. haha, I can't even describe it, but it simply is so well written!!
It's me completely getting lost in this ... yeah. "Words are powerful" ... indeed.

I just noticed something (no, U'm still not done ^.^') ... but I will always prefer reading stories like this over watching movies about this. All the thoughts. All the feelings described. It would be a matter of minutes in a movie. Seconds, at times, concerning what they are doing ... but it takes so much longer when reading it and all the feelings described make it sound so much more ... hm. Intense. Less cheap. It's not just the sex that matters, but all these little things as well. Every touch, every kind of emotion, everything that can be felt ...
I have read some NC-17 stories. Some sex scenes. But never has a scene been more intense than this one ... and it can get addicting. Sorta addicting. So addicting. (... ... ... *blush*)

Wow. My heart beat faster and faster with every word I read ... those things Ruki couldn't remember that well anymore. When reading about them, they seemed like some blurry pictures ... my vision blurry. Is that from the screen or the story? ... I believe it's the latter ....
And then.
"I’ll love you with every word that is ever going to leave my lips." ... this sentence. This sentence was enough to make my heart stop for a moment. Forget to breathe, then take deep breaths again. Ignore the tears forming behind my eyes yet again (tell me, how do you do this? ...) ... I asked you about quoting something on LJ before, didn't I? ... This sentence ... <333 ... (seriously, how do you do this? My hearts racing and all of a sudden, you almost make me cry with ... haha ... with the words you've written down ... ^^)

...
... erm.
That ending. Kind of ... erm. I mean. *sigh* *thinking* *wanting to panic as well ... with ruki. for ruki?*
It never happened? It never really happened? It was just a dream? Was it, really? He at least must have been inspired ... must have seen that guy, Uruha, someplace else. Sometime. Sometime last week? It felt so real. Haha, I only read it ... but. It didn't. Didn't sound like. ... I mean.
Just a dream? Just some dream? And he didn't fall asleep in this auditorium as well ... I mean, the girl said it was totally empty by the time the lecture started.
So. Just a dream? Or some parts of realityx mixed up with some dreaming?
He's so shocked ... heart-broken is the wrong word, but I can't find a better one as well.
I am shocked. Kind of heart-broken. Everything calmed down again. The heart having calmed down again out of sadness ... sadness about how the situation looks now. Sadness at how confused and kind of crushed Ruki seems.
But where did the dreaming start ... why ... how ... and. *sigh* gosh.
I won't go on with this any more, 'cause I'll only be repeating myself, probably ... ^.^'

So. Yeah. As I've said earlier already, I really love how you tell this story. I love how much you can go into detail, using words that make one forget everything else ... it's so real.
I really love your way of writing. A lot. The words you chose ...
... *smile* it really is all about the words, after all ^^

*hugs*
(damn, that ending left me so confused Oô)
2nd-May-2008 09:54 pm (UTC)
Dear my Varjot. Did that kiss... fluster you? ... I... somewhat got that impression. >D
Hmm... it feels real, ne, doesn't it... That's why a poet needs the pain for, eh...

I was lost I was lost, crossed lines I shouldn't have crossed...

Random but... that song just came up. How... fitting (for me, right now, at least, for me, my self, and maybe... for Ruki in this story?

Hmm, yeah about the movie-matter. It's true. I love movies in which you can see the thoughts on people's faces. Where scenes like a simple kissing scene are prolongued, built up, and then released, in details and beautiful ways of filming it... Alas. There not that many movies (that I have seen) that are like that. Shall I become Drehbuchautor? oO ... I think that some Japanese movies capture things like those much better... because, I found, because they have this stillness about them, they can get far more intense. It's more about feelings than it is in many hollywood movies.

Never read anything as addicting? ... (addicting? 'so so "" '... double entendre? XD Nyar <3 Your blush... nyar x33)

I like speeding up your heart x3

Wow. Just ~wow~ at your reactions, your emotions... your reactions, yes. Wow. How I do it? I use words... Things that are kept within me. You'd seldomly hear things like those from my lips... unless... well. It's there *points at her heart* where my ~words~ come from. And *points a tiny bit lower* from there, too. Hm... thank you. I... loved that sentence. That single one. Meant much to me, spilt from his lips, conveyed by those... honey lips, to him...

Thank you.

I tend to break hearts with what I ... write.

And it's left open ne. There's no answer within the story... no ... tangible answer, whether it was, or not. If... Well. Just to say as much, what I felt... I don't think that Ruki would be so confused as if to not remember what is dream and what isn't but that... leaves tons more of questions open ne.

I don't control my stories.
Some... thingone controls ... me? ... Call it muse. Or. hm. yeah.
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3rd-May-2008 08:09 pm (UTC)
=DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Nooooo though... *quivering eyebrows* I don't want my lunababy to die.... Y____Y... I... I.. *looks down at your dead self* Noo... *wails* Noo... Gods no... I didn't.. I... I ... it wasn't meant to.. to kill... no.... *about to totally cry*

*a God rolling eyes and giving her a tiny hint* ... hey wait... isn't she breathing...? OH GODS THANK YOU!!

*cough* Yeah erm... I love it when you love me ♥ innuende much? xD

Why am I doing what? xD Oh. Maybe because I want you to be inspired and write a fic? XD Hasn't got nothing to do with you when it's you deciding to read a fic ne o-o xDD

Thank you drrrrlin <3 I hope you'll write it now ^ ^
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27th-May-2008 12:02 am (UTC)
Oh my, your english made me think and stuff much more XD Man, it felt so long and then you got the end that he hadn't even been there right, I was disappointed Lol

But wow! That was so great, you could write a book Lol
You're such a great writer!
It was beautiful and hot ;D

Man I'm so tired now, but I had to read this :D But gaaah now I need sleep haha.
See you ne, baii! ^^ <3
27th-May-2008 05:25 am (UTC)
Think and stuff? *laughs* Ne. ^ ^
I'm not even sure if he wasn't there... or simply anyone else wasn't x3

Thaa~nk you ^____^

Maybe you'll dream of them? XD
Oyyyasumiiii ^^ ♥
24th-Jun-2008 01:07 am (UTC)
i finally read it...i saw it last night and saw the length and i'm like...i'll read it later....and i did...and now i'm like O.O""

damn this was H O T!!! no other way to describe this. fucking sexy and hot is what it is.

i loved everything and your words just left me in awe. it's so descriptive that i can practically see this scene in my head right now ^^

and then the ending of it....talk about confusion. what happened? was it all a dream....or did ruki end up in the wrong place or...-goes off thinking- either way~ it was an interesting way to end it

and somehow during this i kept thinking that you were thinking of taking ruki's place somehow~ just a thought though ^.~

awesome ficcu~ i'm off to read some more then ^^
24th-Jun-2008 05:26 am (UTC)
*flails* Nnnnnn =DDD I love fic-comments so damn much *__* It's been too long XD *slaps self to type the others down and finish them gargh*
Yeah, comments like those always make my mornings ^ ^""

*beams* Thank you~~~ ... I still can see the scenes in my head. Clearly, even.

Well what happened... Thing is, I don't know for sure myself. My fics usually take me over. I don't really have so terribly much control ^ ^"" However... people seem to want to cling so much to reality and logic, it's hmmm... interesting for me to see x3

Taking on Ruki's place. . . . . . *_____* Well in a way you're always the characters of your story, somehow you're always in there but but... oouuuuuuuuuuuu my heart x333

Thanks again and OY... you shouldn't read angsty fics when you're feeling good ^ ^" And about ~all~ the others I put up are angsty...? x-x
Else ~ Hope you have fun reading, whose ever you read x3
8th-Aug-2008 10:26 pm (UTC)
OMFG. *_________________*
Wow, I just...I completely look like Ruki-kun right now, I'm speechless.
I'm still wondering if you're human or not, I mean this is too-freaking-amazing to be true. *dies*
Saying that I love it would be the greatest lie of my life, I absolutely adore this, believe me.
Thanks again for leading me to this fic, OMG, I'm so aroused right now *-*
9th-Aug-2008 05:24 am (UTC)
*smiles*
I am glad indeed (and that is an understatement) that you like it so much... or well... adore ^--^
I'm still wondering if you're human or not .. hmmmm *smiles*
Your comment totally made my morning.
You're only welcome. And... have a good time with your... arousal <3
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21st-Nov-2008 01:55 pm (UTC)
Aww, thank you so much... comments like these mean a lot to me <33
I'm glad you were able to feel it ^--^

I'm curious though... since it's quite a while that I've written this, how did you come across it?
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2nd-Dec-2008 11:50 am (UTC)
oh my god o.o this is amazing *_*
2nd-Dec-2008 08:31 pm (UTC)
Nyan~... thank you ^_^
16th-Oct-2009 06:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you for suggesting it *q*

To put it in the simplest of words...I LOVE IT! Really..I can't even begint o describe just what exactly this has gotten feeling...There...Really isn't any real words to say that could describe it.

Sometimes silence can explain more than words *in total awe*
16th-Oct-2009 08:55 pm (UTC)
Wow... thank you.
It's ages ago that I read it myself, I just remember that people like it, so I keep recommending it *laughs*

... Thank you again. A lot.
btw you friended and defriended me again xD just in case... you didn't notice xDDD Did you try to friend me 2x?
17th-Oct-2009 10:25 am (UTC)
I took your recommendation and... wow! O_O that was amazing!
I'm glad I read it. I'm saving this to memories too!
<33
17th-Oct-2009 09:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you ~~
That means a lot. Thanks :3

<3
11th-Nov-2009 01:28 pm (UTC)
...... Oh my god.
OH MY GOD JGWDVX HWBD WHY DIDN'T I FIND THIS FIC EARLIER!?!?! *___*

This is pure win, bb. I mean, I can't even begin to describe how amazing this is. I adore Uruha's personality in here; confident, alluring, in control and one of the reasons is because we dont really see much of that characterization of him, which is sad, because I honestly think it fits him perfectly. ♥ I also love how you made Ruki sound like how everyone must be like during their first days in College. There's this tinge of innocence in him, which is endearing, but of course later on we kind of found out that he's not as innocent as he is hahahahaa. xDDDD

I just stared, and, I didn’t want to admit it to myself, but I was blushing. Not that I would deny that I don’t mind guys but… I prefer girls, you know.
Poor, in-denial Ruki. I can't blame him for checking professor Uruha out, tho. I mean, come on.

“If any of you feel as if they would want to challenge me on a verbal level, if any of you are of the opinion you might even remotely come close to winning any battle held against me, go ahead and try. Go ahead and try if you have the courage to stand up and speak what is truly on what you call minds, and I call fastidious cells that haven’t even learnt proper articulation, yet try to spell the word ‘onomatopoeia’. Try and tell me what it is that you are deeply concerned about, that made you come here and draw on my time and effort. If you really think you have something to say, stand up and speak. If you have any doubts on why you are here, today, then leave. Leave the auditorium this minute, because I will not tolerate half heartedness. Do you still want to challenge me? Go on and try.” His voice dropped half an octave, drawling his last words out. “You will go… down.”
I hate to quote his whole paragraph because it was too long but kjsfhcvsd MY, DID I JUST CREAM THERE OR WHAT? *A* Feisty!Smug!Uruha is the smex, seriously.

He was looking down. Relaxed. Controller of the situation. An amused smirk formed in the right corner of his mouth.
Have I said Feisty!Smug!Uruha is the smex? No, saying it once isn't enough TAT.

“I’ll love you with every word that is ever going to leave my lips.”
I think my heart just melt. ;A; <3 <3 <3
It was hard to comprehend, with how the whole story ended and went on, all the while this line thrown somewhere in the middle, it kind of makes me think Uruha is not just some hot professor Ruki had his eyes on. And I don't really want to get ahead of myself so maybe, crossing my fingers to this, a sequel? xDDDD

Overall, an amazing piece. I seriously want to quote more and comment longer but I think I rambled enough. xDDDDD Ahh, I will probably stalk more of your stories once I get better (sick season sucks, which is well, probably the reason why I just rambled nonsense up there.) seeing as you have a couple moar of my OTP written up as well.~♥

And oh, this is sooo going to my mems. 8DDDD
11th-Nov-2009 07:12 pm (UTC)
Aww, thank you so much, dear. It's something so unexpected to just randomly get comments to old stories. This here comment made my heart jump. As I love them long. *smiles* And I love it when people even go and interpret parts of the story or
the characters.

Ah yeah... many picture Uruha quite different, but well. To me, he can't be anything else but a man. No matter how many garters he wears, he's not the least bit girly. To me, anyway. So yeah, Feisty!Smug! wouldn't be wrong. Had/have him as rpc, he was that way, too...

Go on and read, and spread the word. :3 I hope you comment those, too. *laughs*
It's my OTP as well so~ I almost exceptionally write that pairing ^ ^

You didn't ramble nonsense ... *smiles*
Thank you so much <3
And good health to you~

Edited at 2009-11-11 07:15 pm (UTC)
5th-Jul-2011 05:48 am (UTC)
Ooooh... I have to translate THIS! *_*
Would you give me permission, please?
I can't describe my feelings properly, but this fic is definetely great and memorable. I'm delighted!
5th-Jul-2011 11:19 am (UTC)
Thank you!
Yes, fare like last time, and you'll have my permission.
I'm glad you enjoyed it~♫
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